This isn't bad for one of your firsts but I'll be honest with you. Too many focals. The render and the c4d should be working together to create an outcome but in this case they are too far away from each other so they could almost be two separate sigs. The next sig that you make I don't wanna see it any bigger than 375x100 because your creating too much space between things.
What program are you using again?
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