I would have lowered the opacity of the scan lines a little (maybe more than what they already are) but I do like this one a lot Siph. Colors are good, lighting is good. Only the border is a bit strange too. I would have cut off the sides totally.
Theres really nothing more I can say that Mariah has'nt. Good job though. Maybe sharpen it a little bit. Embedded vimeo videos will not play in HD because I don't have a paid account on vimeo. Click on the HD button to view the video in HD on vimeo's site if you so choose to do so.